Reflection on second draft

I cut down a lot of my quotes for this second draft and I went back in and revised sentences as well. There were some parts that needed more explanation, and some parts that just needed less words. I noticed that I use “This shows…” a lot and so I changed those sentences. I also wrote my introduction paragraph for this second draft, but I’m waiting to write my conclusion until after the second peer review. The two people who reviewed my paper said that it was organized well so I’m happy about that. I also have often been taught that your topic sentence should be the first sentence of your paragraph, my peer reviewers found topic sentences within the beginning of my paragraphs so I’m not sure about reorganizing my paragraphs sentences around, but they said that the organization of the paragraphs in order was good. I still have the headers for each of my subtopic in my papers but I was going to keep that in for the next round because then if other people review and say it should be organized differently, it’s easy for them to point out where the sections should be moved around